Writing & Editing & Tips

[sepid12ir]

I have some questions:

1-The subject of essays are usually about to choose between two options, and If I find some benefits in both options and choose one, where (In the Main part or introductory part) and how much should I write about the benefits of the other option?
2-How many word are needed to write a standard essay for Toefl exam?
3-Are you sure that I should not use “between” for comparing more than two things? (I have seen this case so many times, for example in the book of “Delta’s Next Generation Toefl Test”)
Thanks

Sorry, I didn't quite catch yr firs question? would you clarify what you mean?l
but in case you mean there are prons n cons together in a subject, so there is a way
for example you are talking about the advantages of t.v n beside you see some disadvantages, here in yr itroductory paragraph you have to mention two advantages n one disadvantage or vice versa( I mean 2 disadvantages n 1 advantage) n then describe them in yr body parags
by the way, you have to pay attention what the topic is. for example when it is said to write the advantages of t.v you should not include disadvantage in yr writing any more
but if it wants you to talk about t.v you can contain disadvantages n advantages together
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about yr second question, take a look at this page, you can get yr answer

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[sepid12ir]

by the way, would you plz write about this subject if you had time...I have to write n I will write it here as well, but yr ideas might help me to have a better writingl
"Parents are too permissive now a days"

[SCYTHE]

I made some changes, I would like to see your essay & your suggestions about my essay.

Parents are too permissive nowadays, In your opinion, is such a relationship good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

In these times, with improving technology, people’s attitude toward their children have changed completely, in the past children position in the family were different, they had to take more responsibilities. They had to do many jobs for their family either at home or outside the home, actually they were great assistants for their parents. The boys helped their father on the farm and the girls aided their mother to do tasks like washing, cooking, cleaning, and so on. However, nowadays the children have got more freedom and parents’ expectations have reduced. Children just do their homework and spend the rest of their time playing computer game or watching TV or hanging out with friends. I strongly disagree with this condition, and I think it has so many disadvantages for the children and community that in the following I will mention them.

First of all, the children who brought up in these families can not do their responsibilities well. As a matter of fact, They have been spoiled by their parents, They do not know how to make money or how to deal with different people. So when they enter to the society, They do not know what they should do, in addition they have weak personalities and can not tolerate difficult situations. These factors result in some defeats in their lives and

may lead to they go after drug or maybe they commit crimes or suicide.

Second of all, these children used to live in comfort, how you can expect them to be useful for their people when they are not familiar with the real life. They will break in burden of responsibilities. You can not expect them to do challenging or time consuming jobs. They probably need to get vacation frequently. This is a complete tragedy when we look at how much money the government has invested on them, so what are the results of this investment?. So many lazy and spoiled persons who just know how to amuse themselves. This is a huge loss.

To sum up, in my opinion sometimes parental love is hazardous and parents should be trained to how bring up their children well. Their children should learn to take responsibility, know how to endure difficult situations and also know that they owe to their community.

[Narsis_E]

3-Are you sure that I should not use “between” for comparing more than two things? (I have seen this case so many times, for example in the book of “Delta’s Next Generation Toefl Test”)
Thanks

Hi pals,

I really admire the job being done in this topic and try to contribute more.

prefer to go to a European country and between these countries I choose Norway

There isn't any problem with this sentence, between is ok!
between them...among them, both are right.


between should be used with two or more people or things that we see as individual:
Iran is located between Iraq, turkey and pakistan.
But if there wasn't the name of countries in the rest of sentense ,it was better to use among

among should be used when we see the people or things as part of a group or mass:
she found her passport among the clothes.

[sepid12ir]

You may also have noticed the difference between new generations with their parents. By just looking at every one's life you can notice that nowadays parents have become too permissive. Children are not cared by their parents like before and they are free to do whatever they like. our parents used to devote their time to rear us in the best possible way but now a days, having so many irresponsible guys who waste their times on wandering and doing unimportant things is the consequence of having so many permissive parents.

As it is mentioned, one of the consequences is irresponsible children who dump their works, problems and duties on others and there is no one in their families to stir them up. And that’s the way they grow up.

The other problem which our new generation has is that they may never understand the value of life and may never notice that God have mercy on them. Because no one has ever expressed the importance and the value of life to them and that's why their minds are almost occupied with unimportant stuff.

Just having a few decent guys who are able to manage their own lives is one of the worst consequences of letting children be free. Because in their own families they haven’t learnt the correct way of living so they can not handle a new life and that’s why the number of unsuccessful lives has increased in last decades.

According to our juveniles' lives, parents are asked to be more careful and more attentive because following the current method of rearing the children may ruin the future lives of every one and that may destroy the future of our country.

[SCYTHE]

It can be quite difficult to learn a new language. What do you think are the most difficult aspects of learning a new language? Give reasons and examples to support your response?

Most of the people moaning about how difficult is to learn a new language, some say they have problems in the listening part, some have problems in the speaking part and etc. In my opinion the most difficult parts depend on what language you are studying, but for me in English the most difficult aspects are pronunciation and grammar. In the following, I will mention why these are difficult for me.

Each Language has its own system of sounds and the way of pronouncing changes from one language to the other language. For instance, English students with Farsi as a first language may have a struggle to utter the words like “scythe” or “breathe” and so on, because they do not have the sounds like “th” in their mother tongue. However, by practicing I can improve my pronunciation, but it definitely takes time and for me who study by myself the situation is much harder.

In addition to the phonetics, I need to improve my English grammar. Learning to use appropriate grammar is very important, you must first know to use true structures to make an expression, without using proper grammar your text or talk will be vague. I find some difficulties in learning English grammar, first, in each structure or rule there are some exceptions and unfortunately I can not find a logical relation that help me to distinguish the exceptions, so I just have to memorize these rules and exceptions. Second, I have a very weak memory, I forget things quickly, as a result after a short period I forget the structures that I just memorized them. This will be a complete disaster when I am speaking with someone, I forget some of these rules, thus I have to think and try to remember the rules, no need to mention, this is ridiculous and embarrassing.

In conclusion, learning a new language is a time consuming task, there are so many difficulties in learning it, but for me the most difficult aspects are to learn to use correct structures and utter sounds like a native speaker of English.

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It can be quite difficult to learn a new language. What do you think are the most difficult aspects of learning a new language? Give reasons and examples to support your response?

In conclusion, learning a new language is a time consuming task, there are so many difficulties in learning it, but for me the most difficult aspects are to learn to use correct structures and utter sounds like a native speaker of English.

good job pal. I see finally you make ur own topic. congratulations. it's very hard when u r learning a non native language though going to speak like'em!!! but practicing make us close to the target. for hundred precent to make it I think we need to be in that language atmosphere. I mean to be there or to make a place of that language native speakers. that'll help us out alot

[SCYTHE]

good job pal. I see finally you make ur own topic. congratulations. it's very hard when u r learning a non native language though going to speak like'em!!! but practicing make us close to the target. for hundred precent to make it I think we need to be in that language atmosphere. I mean to be there or to make a place of that language native speakers. that'll help us out alot

Thanks buddy, actually speaking like a native speaker of English was a joke
good luck

[SCYTHE]

You may also have noticed the difference between new generations with their parents. By just looking at every one's life you can notice that nowadays parents have become too permissive. Children are not cared by their parents like before and they are free to do whatever they like. our parents used to devote their time to rear us in the best possible way but now a days, having so many irresponsible guys who waste their times on wandering and doing unimportant things is the consequence of having so many permissive parents.

As it is mentioned, one of the consequences is irresponsible children who dump their works, problems and duties on others and there is no one in their families to stir them up. And that’s the way they grow up.

The other problem which our new generation has is that they may never understand the value of life and may never notice that God have mercy on them. Because no one has ever expressed the importance and the value of life to them and that's why their minds are almost occupied with unimportant stuff.

Just having a few decent guys who are able to manage their own lives is one of the worst consequences of letting children be free. Because in their own families they haven’t learnt the correct way of living so they can not handle a new life and that’s why the number of unsuccessful lives has increased in last decades.

According to our juveniles' lives, parents are asked to be more careful and more attentive because following the current method of rearing the children may ruin the future lives of every one and that may destroy the future of our country.

As you know my English is not good enough to proofread your essay, so I put your text in an English forum, and hopefully a native speaker of English edited it

You may have noticed the difference between generations with their parents. By just looking at every one's life you can see that nowadays parents have become too permissive. Children are not cared for by their parents like before and they are free to do whatever they like. Our parents used to devote their time to rearing us in the best possible way but nowadays, the many irresponsible young people who waste their time on wandering and doing unimportant things is the consequence of having so many permissive parents.

As it is mentioned, one of the consequences is irresponsible children who dump their work, problems and duties on others and there is no one in their families to stir them up. That's the way they grow up. [Doesn't this merely repeat what you have already said?]

The other problem which our new generation has is that they may never understand the value of life and may never notice that God has mercy on them. This is because no one has ever expressed the importance and the value of life to them. That is why their minds are almost occupied with unimportant matters.

Only having a few decent people who are able to manage their own lives is one of the worst consequences of letting children be free. As in their own families they haven’t learnt the correct way of living, they cannot handle life and that’s why the number of unsuccessful lives has increased in last decades.

According to our juveniles' lives Owing to the effect on juveniles of permissive upbringing, parents are asked to be more careful and more attentive because following this method of rearing children may ruin the future lives of everyone and that may destroy the future of our country.

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As you know my English is not good enough to proofread your essay, so I put your text in an English forum, and hopefully a native speaker of English edited it

would u mind to address those English Editing forums, it'll be very helpful I think