A Group To Study English (schedule at the first page)l

First hi to all of my classmates in this group and
secondly special regards to the new teacher dear Dianella
i also wish best of luck for dear Sepideh and dear jeff Hardy
!i hope they'll soon join us again
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ESSAY
My Dream House
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Actually i've not chance to think about this issue alot but this is a good chance at least for me to do it
i would like to have a house i mean not an apartment :31: as i think presence of greenery and a yard is a must, i want to wake up by smell of flowers in the garden and carol of birds.And at night i want to stare at stars in the sky so the house should be away from Light pollution of city or there should be some such solutions for that problem:13: because i can't live with out looking at sky at least twice a day! :40::19:but as i'm a contente girl so i just like a medium size house with neccessory furnitures only i dont like so many extra and expencive things :27:.The most necessory item is huge amount of love and the personally arrangment of everything in the house which makes it unique and beautifull . Two floor is enough i think so.i don't remember anymore now but i will think about it...what a dream house! is't a dream house?!:23:The end

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My dream house

Don’t make fun of me please

People are alive with their dreams and hope. Although some of our dreams are unavailable but actually we do our best to achieve some of it. Having a big house with a swimming pool, green garden, luxuriance means and instruments, pretty statuses and many other glorious things is most of our dream house.
In my viewpoint, dream house must be cozy and snug. In addition my dream house is a cottage which is made by wood and has the little circular windows with a chimney in top. Also it must be has a small garden full of multicolor flowers. Its all instruments are wooden and have a small kitchen. In its yard you can find a small swimming pool, an easy chair and a blue sunshade. My dream house is in middle the jungle and near the sea.
At the end I like a kind and lovely family live there for ever. :11:

Describe your dream house

I wake up when sun light fall on my face every morning. I stand near the window, pull window shade and open it. In this time, morning wind is pleasurable. I am watching outside and I can see a very big yard in my front. Ground is covered with lawn. Beautiful flowers are in left side and in right side is a several fruit tree (apple, orange,...). My room is in second floor. There are work room, study room and guest rooms in second floor additionally. Living room and kitchen are in first floor. Four big vases contain rose flowers are in first floor, two of them is in kitchen front and the others is in living room corners near the window. First floor has two big windows in every side. One portrait of a face that his hairs are deuced in every side is hanging in living room wall. Kitchen is enough large. A life- size mirror is near the front door. I want to ramble out of doors. Its very good feels that walking without shoes in around. Yard is very big and we can get big party with relative and friends there. House is remote from city and it’s very quiet. Near the house is a hill, I climb up it and sit under weeping willow tree shadow. I can see my house, its almost simple but with lovely view. Every thing is nice from here when sun want to down. I am in my dream house and I want to thanks from God for everything.

Hey buddies :)

really honored to be a part of this active and eager group! ^_^

Let me give a brief explanation about how I'm gonna deal with your writings first:

I will make corrections in cases of

Grammatical
Punctuational
Dictatorial

which are spotted in red and there also will be just-to-make-it-better suggestions which mean that your sentence is NOT wrong but there is a better way to express the meaning. These corrections will be spotted in pink.

And I will score your writings from 1 to 5 according to the number of corrections made to them.

Wish you all the best
Dianella :20:

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نوشته شده توسط singleguy [ برای مشاهده لینک ، با نام کاربری خود وارد شوید یا ثبت نام کنید ]

I wish my dream house were some were beautiful with great scenery around. Some where not very cold and not very hot. I prefer a houses in somewhere not crowded and rowdy and the privacy of the house is also important for me. My dream house should be roomy but not huge because I can’t stand small and cramped houses. I also can’t stand dingy and shabby houses. Well now let’s get in…. I like a house with a great library with all studying equipments. It also should have a great hall with great design. A 2 floor house with 2 rooms in the second floor that these two floors are joined together. I don’t like very modern houses, because they make me lazy:31: I prefer to close and open doors by myself not with a button. Wow…I missed the garden. The garden is also very important. I love flowers and caring about them. But such a house can be found just in dreams, am I right? [ برای مشاهده لینک ، با نام کاربری خود وارد شوید یا ثبت نام کنید ] l

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some were= Somewhere
a houses= a house (singular)
for = to
2 floor = two-floor
in = on
equipments = equipment
also should = should also
great design = great interior design
that these two floors are joined together. = and the two floors are adjoined through an interior staircase
very = too

additional notes:
The usage of vocabulary is perfect :)

score: 4.5

Best of luck

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نوشته شده توسط rayhaneh [ برای مشاهده لینک ، با نام کاربری خود وارد شوید یا ثبت نام کنید ]

ESSAY
My Dream House

Actually i've not chance to think about this issue alot but this is a good chance at least for me to do it
i would like to have a house i mean not an apartment :31: as i think presence of greenery and a yard is a must, i want to wake up by smell of flowers in the garden and carol of birds.And at night i want to stare at stars in the sky so the house should be away from Light pollution of the city or there should be some such solutions for that problem:13: because i can't live with out looking at sky at least twice a day! :40::19:but as i'm a contente girl so i just like a medium size house with neccessory furnitures only i dont like so many extra and expencive things :27:.The most necessory item is a huge amount of love and the personally arrangment of everything in the house which makes it unique and beautifull . Two floor is enough i think so.i don't remember anymore now but i will think about it...what a dream house! is't a dream house?!:23:The end

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i've not chance → I haven't had a chance
alot → a lot
chance → opportunity
must → necessity
with out → without
extra → acceccories
so → NOT NEEDED
neccessory → necessary
arrangment → arrangement
beautifull → beautiful
Two floor is→ two floors are (plural)
i don't remember anymore now → nothing more comes to my mind for now.

Adittional notes:
the whole writing is so smooth with really smart usage of vocab.

score: 4

Cheers ^_^

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نوشته شده توسط dourtarin [ برای مشاهده لینک ، با نام کاربری خود وارد شوید یا ثبت نام کنید ]

Describe your dream house

I wake up when sun light fall on my face every morning. I stand near the window, pull window shade and open it. In this time, morning wind is pleasurable. I am watching outside and I can see a very big yard in my front. Ground is covered with lawn. Beautiful flowers are in left side and in right side is a several fruit tree (apple, orange,...). My room is in second floor. There are work room, study room and guest rooms in second floor additionally. Living room and kitchen are in first floor. Four big vases contain rose flowers are in first floor, two of them is in kitchen front and the others is in living room corners near the window. First floor has two big windows in every side. One portrait of a face that his hairs are deuced in every side is hanging in living room wall. Kitchen is enough large. A life- size mirror is near the front door. I want to ramble out of doors. Its very good feels that walking without shoes in around. Yard is very big and we can get big party with relative and friends there. House is remote from city and it’s very quiet. Near the house is a hill, I climb up it and sit under weeping willow tree shadow. I can see my house, its almost simple but with lovely view. Every thing is nice from here when sun want to down. I am in my dream house and I want to thanks from God for everything.

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sun light fall → sunlight radiates / shines
pleasurable → pleasant / splendid
is a several fruit tree (apple, orange,...) → there are various fruit trees
room, room → NOT NEEDED
in → on
in → on
additionally → NOT NEEDED
two of them is → two of them are (plural)
others is → others are (plural)
that his hairs are deuced → with his hair deuced(hey what's this word deuce?)
enough large → large enough
Its very good feels that walking without shoes in around. → it feels so good to walk around without shoes. / with bare feet.
Yard is very big and we can get big party with relative and friends there. → the yard is big enough to hold big parties with relatives and friends.
down → sets
from → NOT NEEDED

additional notes:
Such good attention to the details :)

score: 4

Best of luck :20:

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نوشته شده توسط گیسو [ برای مشاهده لینک ، با نام کاربری خود وارد شوید یا ثبت نام کنید ]

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NOW

My dream house

Don’t make fun of me please

People are alive with their dreams and hope. Although some of our dreams are unavailable but actually we do our best to achieve some of it. Having a big house with a swimming pool, green garden, luxuriance means and instruments, pretty statuses and many other glorious things is most of our dream house.
In my viewpoint, dream house must be cozy and snug. In addition my dream house is a cottage which is made by wood and has the little circular windows with a chimney in top. Also it must be has a small garden full of multicolor flowers. Its all instruments are wooden and have a small kitchen. In its yard you can find a small swimming pool, an easy chair and a blue sunshade. My dream house is in middle the jungle and near the sea.
At the end I like a kind and lovely family live there for ever. :11:

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some of it → them
Having → to have
statuses → statues
most of our dream house. → the dream most of us have
viewpoint → point of view
cottage which is made by wood and → a wooden cottage
the → NOT NEEDED
in → on the
circular → round-shaped
multicolor → colorful
Its → NOT NEEDED
have → has
easy → comfortable
middle the → in the middle of the

additional notes:
careful in details and a good front matter too! :)

score: 4

Good luck :)

In the name of God

The simplicity of life cannot be seen in the flashy furniture or fashionable homes in my opinion. Living in the palace or the skyscraper is so enticement and desirable for all people let alone me. But when I am pondering about my dream home, I like to live in a woody home with all man-made furniture in the middle of the jungle with 3 rooms and one attic. I d love of the attic with that dampness smell because this is clearly remembered for me looking at the rain back of the window and smelling this dampness in the home as I enjoy watching the natural factors

MY DREAM HOUSE

A dream house may seem unreal house at present time but it will come true if you think about it and wishing to have from deep of your heart.
My dream house is a villa nearby the sea that located in an area with mild weather. Every day when I get up from my bed I wish to see the sea from my bedroom's window and do walking beside it. If we enter from gate we will see a beautiful scene of a big yard which contains different kind of trees and flowers, a big swimming pool that reflects blue color of sky within itself, a garage to park my family car.
It has two floors, the first one for living room, kitchen and dining room and the second floor for bedrooms and study room with huge number of books. my house is furnished by modern furniture.
In addition I wish to have a nice and happy family to live with me inside it.